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Backstory poll is up!

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http://www.gp32x.de/board/index.php?showtopic=47092&pid=709965&st=0&#entry709965



Hey. It was requested last time, that we discuss polling options before opening the polls. It''s not too late to submit a backstory either. Just head over here, make sure you read the guidlines first!

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http://tincs.jottit.com/backstory



Anyway, here we go, in no particular order. If one of these are yours and I''ve done somthing wrong, PM me!

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Technocracy

Despite massive protests, in 2050 the first commercial non-medical cyber enhancements became available. The rich could now have their senses, muscles and even their brains enhanced to superhuman levels.

The corporations that had first developed the cyborg enhancements for the military, jealously guarded their secrets. Whoever controlled the technology stood to make a lot of money. A new class of people emerged. While cyber enhancements became more affordable, it was still out of the poor man's reach. As the rich got stronger, smarter and richer, the divide between rich and poor widened.

Outraged by this social injustice, groups of scientists and gifted hackers got together to develop their own implants. Their cyber enhancements had to be open, affordable and available to anyone. Their early designs were awkward to use and required a lot of technical knowledge. After a few years their enhancements became usable to the average person, though. Moreover, they could be produced by the 3D printers that most households already owned.

While their cyber enhancements were still very much superior, the corporations were starting to feel the surging competition from open alternatives. To compete, they started giving away their implants. Those who took the deal soon found there was a catch, though. They were completely dependent on the corporations for support and maintenance of their cyber enhancements. Switching to open technologies was contractually prohibited and dangerous by design. Their bodies were now owned by the corporations, essentially making them servants, or worse: slaves.

This is when the war started. Radical factions of the open cyber enhancement movement started blowing up corporate buildings. They started liberating people, illegally replacing their commercial enhancements with open ones. The corporations pushed governments to use the terrorist scare to enact repressive measures. As the conflict deepened, anybody in the open cyber enhancement movement was in danger of being arrested and detained without trial.

Pretty soon all-out civil war erupted. In a desperate move to keep control, the government started to force people to be enhanced. At first there were rumours. Supposedly, strong opponents of implants were suddenly enhanced and happy about it. Of course most people didn't believe any of it, not until the mobile upgrade units started rolling in. Those who didn't flee lined up in the streets. Many looked terrified as they entered the giant machines, but all of them were overjoyed when they came out as cyborgs.


OrR Backstory

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In a not so distant future, a democratically elected but in reality totalitarian government has ruled over Europe for decades. However, what was once a shiny clean utopia under constant and nigh perfect surveillance, realized with advanced technology, has slowly been decaying in the last dozen or so years. The global economy has recently accelerated towards a meltdown. The European single-party-democracy is stable but opportunities for subversive activities are on the rise. The almost extinct underground movement is finally gaining a foothold again and picks up the long abandoned fight for freedom one more time. The freedom fighters have got expert hackers and scientists on their side but the old government has not lost it''s teeth just yet...

The cities were originally an open and clean mixture of simple modern architecture with well preserved historical buildings still being present and beautifully embedded into the modern cityscape. Much of that remains but dirt and decay have claimed quite a few shady corners and lesser buildings. Old and modern buildings alike are suffering from insufficient care. Also, the underground freedom fighters have opened the previously well sealed entrances to sewers, abandoned underground parking lots and other places that were never meant to be seen again in order to uphold the illusion of a perfect utopia.

One of the game''s two factions are the heavily armed governmental police forces which are equipped with somewhat more primitive but very powerful weaponry. They have almost exclusively been dealing with disobeying individuals for a long time. In theory, they are prepared for an all-out civil war but theory has to be put into practice...

The other are the freedom fighters, fast and good at hiding. They lack power but make up for it with advanced technology hacks that take advantage of all the resources they can get.



GPSchnyders Backstory

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After the third Collapse of the economy the United Nations of the World decided to cut down much of their Problems. Megacities were build, cut from the outworld. Most of the People were left outside to starve, only wealthy or brilliant People were allowed inside the Walls of the Cities. Some of the bright heads decided against being Part of the now Company driven Cities. They decided to not live secure behind Corporate Walls, feed and used by the Companies.

With their genius and the knowledge they had they started rotting groups of people together outside the Walls of the Megacities and started building small villages.

Inside the Walls more and more People tried to go against the Corporates. They lived in the Shadows of the rich Cities, fighting for their lives, doing the dirty Work for Corporate Leaders to finance their living. They spend money on Weapons, Upgrades and Technology.

The Villages outside the big walls got bigger and better build. Most technology could be redone without electricity at all, just powered by small steam packs. It din''t take long and the Outside Villages had nearly the same technologic level as the lower Grades of the Megacities. But without being observed and commanded by Company leaders.

With a small revolution inside the Walls, with the help from the Outside villagers the lower grades broke the walls and opened them for a better living together. The Megacities got closed at a higher level where now only the wealthy ones live protected.

But the opening didn''t just bring the freedom wanted. It also brought hate and fear against the new. Cyberpunks against Steampunks. Fighting for Pieces of the City.


Retorts Backstory


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HISTORY

50 years from now, the exponential growth of technology as we know it hits boiling point. Due to physical limits and lack of resources, advancements in science halt. Chaos breaks out. First, the internet reaches max capacity. Rapid information ceases. The Progression of the technological age dies, and with it, the systems that run modern society. Governments of the super continents disconnect from the rest of the world. The people revolt government and religion. Technology is rejected. All but the tools to survive.

Survivalism is the only thing left in chaos.
BACKGROUND

Once known as contemporary New York City, “Node Y” is untouched by renovation or repair. Due to built-up pollution, vegetation has failed to outgrow the city. Resources are still abundant in the city. Clans populate the area with blood and war. Most clans have scientific/military backgrounds, so they still labor in technological means to survive and live. In Node Y, the will to live is directly proportional to the motivation to kill.

The focus is on 2 big rival clans in Node Y.

Turla – renowned for stealth and strategy, their success comes from team work.

NDS – the brute force clan. Subtly is not their thing.


Jacks Backstory
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In the distant, but not too distant future, man is under its biggest threat yet. It started, in a peaceful time, we had stopped fighting over petty oil and land. We''ve started working together to solve our problems, using the advance of technology. There hasn''t be a war for over fifty years. Each individual nation has still kept its own defensive forces, but they''re more ceremonial now.

It was long suspected that Titan, the moon of the planet Saturn, contained life. It had been known for centuries that water existed in some form on the planet. While our scientific expeditions had found nothing, we had good belief that closer towards the warm core some life would exist although it was most likely in the microscopic form. Titan was soon split up, proportionately to the size of the country that was to receive each slice. Deep-core mining, the mining of the precious minerals far bellow the surface, began. It is believed that one of these mines was the source of the virus and that it had been carried it back to Earth in a cargo transport, along with a consignment of iron.

The transport reached Earth in the year 2156. By 2158 only one fifth of the population of Earth remained.

Cities emptied, countries fell apart. From what was known, the biological make up of the virus was similar to that of viruses that have evolved on Earth. The virus reproduced and mutated rapidly, giving us no chance of fighting it at all. A very limited number of people are immune to the virus, about ten out of one hundred, these, along with people who have managed to avoid the infection are the only humans left on Earth.

Violence quickly erupted, as the survivors fought for food and necessities. Using whatever weapons had been left over, gangs formed to control and profit over the food market. These gangs turned into factions and after a year of bloodshed, only two factions remain.


Discuss!
 
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(You're lucky I put this up, it dosen't cohere to the guidelines at all, if it's not fixed, it probably won't go into the poll)


What the fack are you telling me? When I was writing it the max was still 600. Some words dont hurt. Post it, if people dont want to read it then its their choice, bullsh*t. This looks like school were you need to make a fakkin summury between the 350-400 words of a kilometers long text.
 
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No, that's not the problem. You've written a short story, it's not giving nearly enough detail nor creating a proper world.
 
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''''Butterman'''' said:
No, that''''''''s not the problem. You''''''''ve written a short story, it''''''''s not giving nearly enough detail nor creating a proper world.
yet hes doing it out of his free time,
i dont believe their should be any restrictions on anything, especially on thing like this, its an opensource community contributing to the project.
however i do believe it shouldnt have been included, it doesnt justify the arrogance of the statement, simply exclude it and put a note at the end of the post or PM him

however,
so far OrR seems decent however,
lose the hackers, there can be computer hackers, but dont make it the large point of the game, i see Mirrors Edge coming into that story
also the government should have advance tech not the rebels
the reason why people tend to like rebels are theyre the under dogs, giving them advance technology doesnt exactly make that clear, and sounds a bit cheesy saying theyre hackers etc. jut make it regular people with 1 or 2 handy people at computers communicating through radio etc

GPSchnyders
also good, however i dont like the steampunk idea too much, might be best keep it all cyberpunk, but have rusty weapons for the rebels and shiny ones for the wealth, and also transfer that to the clothes. however the story could restrict the size of maps and enviroments etc.

Retorts
mmmmmm, well its not bad but i think the other two above are much better, perhaps a compromise such as ones of those electromagnetic/nuclear (sry if ive got the wrong name) bomb, destroy technology. the thing is the entire civilisation isnt going to drop religion, technology and parliament all at once, it goes against human instinct. while it could happen i think the story is quite weak

Jacks
.......is good, kind of reminds me of the recently announced game Mars. although its not the first of its kind, not to many indie games have followed this

so my conclusion

1. OrR / Jacks
2. GPSchnyders
3. Retorts (isnt he doing the GFX)
U. Mithrildor's (Upgradeable, but i believe this was discussed and came from a book, and i didnt like that story either)
 
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'Mithrildor' said:
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(You're lucky I put this up, it dosen't cohere to the guidelines at all, if it's not fixed, it probably won't go into the poll)
What the fack are you telling me? When I was writing it the max was still 600. Some words dont hurt. Post it, if people dont want to read it then its their choice, bullsh*t. This looks like school were you need to make a fakkin summury between the 350-400 words of a kilometers long text.

It's OK to say "fuck" once in a while

emcp: despite the fact that its a 'community project' in reality its buttermans game
 
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I've added my own backstory, hope you guys like it. :)
 
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'PoisonedV' said:
It's OK to say "fuck" once in a while

emcp: despite the fact that its a 'community project' in reality its buttermans game
If it was my game, we'd have a bunch of cartoony gangsters shooting up fully functional brothels.

'Dutch_Cap' said:
I've added my own backstory, hope you guys like it. :)
I've put it up.
 
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Butterman said:
If it was my game, we'd have a bunch of cartoony gangsters shooting up fully functional brothels.
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Guys stop getting so bloody annoyed that we arent listening to every idea.

We dont have to be running a game dev with so much of your guys input. It doesn't actually help us much; infact it is there so you guys will enjoy the end product more. What it also does is bloat pre production time, and cause huge arguments in the community, so please have a bit of consideration for us when we have to put our foot down about restrictions.


I'm reading through the stories now, and will post my impressions of them all.
 
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Dutch: I love it, it has a really cool vibe to it, and would work well in the context of our game. Also congrats on making badass allusions back to the Pandora.

Orr: Very ice story, its nice and concise, it fits the gameplay, and it feels solid.

Gp: Its nice and it works. I don't like the theme personally but i know a lot of people do. Again it works in the context of the game.

Retort: It works, but i'm not too sure about how solid it feels, i guess that could be because you didn't write that much of a description.

Mith: Hmm, as jack said, it doesn't really adhere to the guidelines that well. It is well written, but i don't think it works in the context of what we are aiming for.

Jack: tis solid and it works, good story. Badassness.

I like most of the submissions so far, well done guys! I'm honestly impressed.
 
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'Muzz' said:
Dutch: I love it, it has a really cool vibe to it, and would work well in the context of our game. Also congrats on making badass allusions back to the Pandora.

Orr: Very ice story, its nice and concise, it fits the gameplay, and it feels solid.

Gp: Its nice and it works. I don't like the theme personally but i know a lot of people do. Again it works in the context of the game.

Retort: It works, but i'm not too sure about how solid it feels, i guess that could be because you didn't write that much of a description.

Mith: Hmm, as jack said, it doesn't really adhere to the guidelines that well. It is well written, but i don't think it works in the context of what we are aiming for.

Jack: tis solid and it works, good story. Badassness.

I like most of the submissions so far, well done guys! I'm honestly impressed.
I agree. Mithirildor, your writing was good. It just wasn't the correct style we are wanting for the backstory submissions.

I have no idea how I'm going to vote :eek:, they're all quite good.


Taking yours off now Mith.
 
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Nah, this is something prepoll. We are announcing the backstory poll of TINCS that is tomorrow and we want to show the wall of text before that day to dont rush people up with a large amount of text.
 
'Mithrildor' said:
Nah, this is something prepoll. We are announcing the backstory poll of TINCS that is tomorrow and we want to show the wall of text before that day to dont rush people up with a large amount of text.
Why does that give it any more reason to be posted here instead of the developers corner? This seems like attention whoring to me.

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General talk [Pandora]
General discussion about Pandora console.

Developers' Corner
Discuss all aspects of Pandora programming. Ideas, projects etc.



Notice the Ideas, projects etc in the Developers Corner subtitle?
 
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'Mithrildor' said:
There were no complainst last poll , so why should there be any now?
Oh my god. Thats the worst thing I've ever heard.
 
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'MDave' said:
Why does that give it any more reason to be posted here instead of the developers corner? This seems like attention whoring to me.
Well, it's not attention whoring, it's more the fact that I want as many people as possible to have an input. But, whatever, I won't do it again mummy.

'PoisonedV' said:
Oh my god. Thats the worst thing I've ever heard.
I once crapped in a bucket, then poured the contents of the bucket onto the head of a faggot.
 
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